Seeking a well-structured second line and a horizontal screen. (Author: Myself)

Having nothing better to do, I composed a couplet and would like to ask my fellow enthusiasts for their critique. I feel the second line isn't quite right, so I'd appreciate any suggestions

. First line: The bridal chamber is filled with the colors of spring, the couple consummates their marriage.

Second line: In the hotel bed, amidst lewd sounds and whispers, adulterers engage in their sordid acts.

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